ext_19461 ([identity profile] chicafrom3.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] last01standing 2009-02-19 10:18 pm (UTC)

An amazing start!

I really like the AU you've constructed here. Grace is a fascinating character (and how thrilled am I to see somebody doing something with that particular lose end?). Tobias's low self-esteem comes across really well without being too heavy-handed -- that his reaction to Rachel suggesting hanging out (to prevent him from joining the Sharing) is to assume that she's a Yeerk reads as very true.

And I kind of cheered when he threw the punch.

Like I said, a really great start, and I look forward to seeing where you go with this! ♥

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